Working title: The Journey
Idea in a nutshell
A professional tennis player is being left by his wife, however during his preparation for an upcoming competition his gets in an accident and suffers severe brain damage
Narrative detail
- * Todorov – begins with equilibrium being disrupted
- o Tennis player’s wife is leaving him
- o He gets hit by a car
Idents
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Audience BBFC 15 (idealy)
- * Primary:
- o 18-24 male (identification)
- o C1C2DE (social realist)
- * Secondary:
- o younger (aspiration)
- o AB (protagonist is rich tennis player - identification)
Sound
- * Ambient sound of tennis balls, coach shouting, tyres screeching
- * Foley sound of heartbeat, feet running
- * Record on guitar/bass/uke
Locations
- * Ask Tanay where he trains for tennis court
- * Forrest next to school for jogging/car hitting scene
- * Ask Jasper for wife’s house
- * (hospital bed)
Cinematography
- * Narrative enigma and exposition –
- o cross-cutting protagonist jogging with training in tennis court (show feet running, heartbeat pounding, don’t show face immediately, sound of tennis balls in court while training)
- o Pan over entry slip for competition (coach could be shouting that he won’t ever win ‘that competition’ if he keeps training like this)
2 / 2
- o POV gopro on head when jogging
- o Panning shot over pictures in room when wife is packing (ask Tanay for pictures of him with trophies, if not then photoshop – ask him to bring in tennis clothes and racket at lunch)
Characters, Props
- * Protagonist, ‘John’ – fancy training gear
- * Wife/partner, ‘Susan’/’Paddy’ - makeup, black eye (ask Ellen) - pictures of tennis, packing
- * Coach – whistle, addidas suit
Health and Safety
- * No one will actually get hit by a car
- * Make sandwiches/cupcakes for shoots
If editing these notes (eg to change wife to husband/male partner) don't delete what you had; use the strikethrough tool, and colour for the changes you make
ReplyDelete'Idea in a nutshell' = synopsis (technical term). You haven't noted the personality change/domestic violence, or that partner feels compelled (initially) to stay with 'John' through their recuperation
NARRATIVE: binary opposites? narrative enigma is a basic, key convention - how will you construct that (we've discussed this: framing, editing possibly cross-cutting... [ah: in cin'y; add a note: see CIN'Y below]). Todorov - the training is equilibrium, the disruption is the crash; discovery in some ways is more for the partner - but could also be viewed as the pro's realisation of their altered behaviour, as in J'man.
Idents - briefly denote the contents
Audience - you've put BBFC 15 but 18-24...?! At the moment you're saying 18, but its maybe better to think of 15 to get stronger use of the TisEng/S16 egs? You need SOME reference to research into examples here (and what BBFC ratings mean/allow/ban) - what is typical? Social class you've got (understandably) wrong: U+G of courses suggests identification from C2DEs IF the protagonist is working class. A tennis pro is wealthy; you need to think carefully about how to denote yours as low level - you need to research to be clear on tennis pro levels (eg the Challenger circuit). AND consider how/if you're denoting 'John' as working class. Social realist movies, because they typically get sidelined in arthouse cinemas, are often more ABC1 - reviewed in the likes of The Guardian, not tabloids like The Sun/Mirror/Star.
SOUND - what style/s of non-diegetic music do you plan? eg slow, sad strings-based? Look at how Considine used music in the opening of Tyrannosaur!!!
LOCATIONS - some indication of what you're after from each; what would achieve verisimilitude
CIN'Y: think more about focus too, try to jmake some direct, specific reference to examples you've seen - not least from J'man. Handheld?!?
CHARACTERS - big change here? You need to address extras too: coach; others playing tennis at same time; people in hospital; other jogger/s?...
H+S not getting hit with tennis balls (especially cam operator)!