This is the scene where the Tennis player's partner is leaving him
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NOTES FOR IMPROVEMENT
- Mise-en-scene
- include tennis equipment in the background (racket, bag, water bottle)
- passport (shot of it being put in the bag)
- photos of the couple together and the team (have partner pick them up then put them down again, angrily)
- panning shots of props
- in wardrobe have clear split of his/her side
- have a larger suitcase, get a shot of Cathy grabbing everything from one side of the wardrobe and putting it in the suitcase
- Acting
- include clearer demonstrations for the actor/actress
- make it angrier and sadder
- aggressively throwing clothes into the bag
- slamming down the photos
- get a closeup of her face (expression)
- do a 'final look' around the house (living/kitchen) - more realistic and chance to include more mise-en-scene for exposition
- Editing
- bit at the start has very fast-paced editing, but you can't really see the shots because its so fast
- get some more ELSs to use for establish shots (closer and closer to the house, similar to in Psycho)
- Get shots of the wife entering the car and slamming the door
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